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The map shows proposed plans for the development of the old college campus to be completed by 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The map shows proposed plans for the development of the old college campus to be completed by 2016.
The given map illustrates some suggested constructions to modernize the old college campus that can be finished in 2016. Overall, it is clear that the planned campus will add 7 new changes to the present' s that only has two facilities (main college building and parking lot). In the center of the new campus, there would be a sports complex constructed on a part of the present parking lot. This new complex will be situated near the motorway so the surrounding air quality, consequently, will be affected badly by the cars' fumes. Another change of the new campus will be the construction of a library center and faculty office situated in front of the college entrance. These locations can easily be seen and accessed. As the main college building will be expanded, more classes will be carried out. In the outside of the new campus, a new footbridge would be built over the River Thames in front of the entrance to give students easy access to the planned Student Union and dormitory. The school will make use of the abandoned area to build up more places for students' gathering and accommodation.
The
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given
map illustrates
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some
suggested constructions to modernize the
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old
college
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campus
that can
be finished
in 2016.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the planned
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campus
will
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add
7
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new
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changes
to the
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present&
#039; s that
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only
has two facilities (main college building and parking lot).

In the center of the
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new
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campus
, there would be a sports complex constructed on a part of the present parking lot. This
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new
complex will
be situated
near the motorway
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so
the surrounding air quality,
consequently
, will be
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affected
badly
by the
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cars&
#039; fumes. Another
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change
of the
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new
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campus
will be the construction of a library center and faculty office situated in front of the college entrance. These locations can
easily
be
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seen
and accessed. As the main college building will
be expanded
, more classes will
be carried
out.

The usual preposition for "outside" is "on" not "in". Revise: "on the outside".
In the outside
of the
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new
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campus
, a
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new
footbridge would
be built
over the River Thames in front of the entrance to give students easy access to the planned Student Union and dormitory. The school will
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make
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use
of the abandoned area to build up more places for
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students&
#039; gathering and accommodation.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS academic The map shows proposed plans for the development of the old college campus to be completed by 2016.

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4 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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