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The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where necessary v.1

The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century
The maps describe the developments that occurred in Lakeside town between 2000 and 2009. Overall, Lakeside significantly transformed from a mostly residential area with large amounts of forest into one that underwent forest reduction and focused on facilities for studying, working, shopping as well as relaxing. As can be seen, there were noticeable changes in the north of Lakeside during the 10-year period, excluding the residential area in the north-west direction. In 2009, to the east of the residential area, derelict warehouses and old town were cleared and replaced by a car park and offices. Also, the lake in the north-east of Lakeside was turned into a small pond. In addition, to the south of the residential area, a multi-screen cinema was established on what used to be the arts centre. Next to the multi-screen cinema, the school was relocated and a university was built. Similarly, the southern of Lakeside also witnessed significant developments from 2000 to 2009. To the north-west of the river, the residential area was knocked down and replaced by a shopping centre. Moreover, the woodland was only a half of its original size by 2009, as many trees were chopped down to make way for expanding the former industrial complex. The residential in the south of the town was also demolished to make way for the industrial complex.
The maps
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describe
the developments that occurred in Lakeside town between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, Lakeside
significantly
transformed from a
mostly
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residential
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area
with large amounts of forest into one that underwent forest reduction and focused on facilities for studying, working, shopping
as well
as relaxing.

As can be
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seen
, there were noticeable
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changes
in the north of Lakeside during the 10-year period, excluding the
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residential
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area
in the north-west direction. In 2009, to the east of the
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residential
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area
, derelict warehouses and
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old
town
were cleared
and replaced by a car park and offices.
Also
, the lake in the north-east of Lakeside
was turned
into a
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small
pond.
In addition
, to the south of the
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residential
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area
, a multi-screen cinema
was established
on what
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used
to be the arts
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centre
.
Next
to the multi-screen cinema, the school
was relocated
and a university
was built
.

Similarly
, the southern of Lakeside
also
witnessed significant developments from 2000 to 2009. To the north-west of the river, the
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residential
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area
was knocked
down and replaced by a shopping
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centre
.
Moreover
, the woodland was
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only
a half of its original size by 2009, as
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many
trees
were chopped
down to
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make
way for expanding the former industrial complex. The
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residential
in the south of the town was
also
demolished to
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make
way for the industrial complex.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The maps below show the changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st Century

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