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The tables give information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May in 2007. v.1

The tables give information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May in 2007. v. 1
A glance at the tables provided indicate information about how much temperature was and the daylight hours in two surveyed cities in the same week in May 2007. It is apparent from the supplied data that the degree in Mumbai, India was by far higher than Moscow, Russia. One particular fact highlighted by the figure is that in Mumbai, India, Friday and Sunday bore a striking resemblance in terms of the temperature, occupying with 33 and 29 Celsius degree at 6: 00 and 19: 05 respectively. With regard to Saturday which witnessed the hottest temperature with 34 Celsius degree in the morning and 29 Celsius degree in the evening. When it comes to Moscow, Russia, there was precisely 8 and 5 Celsius degree on Friday, compared to 10 and 2 Celsius degree on Saturday at 4: 15 and 22: 00, in turn. At the same time, standing at the highest degree in the sunrise time, at 13 Celsius degree, the temperature on Sunday experienced 9 Celsius degree in the sunset time.
A glance at the tables provided indicate information about how much
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was and the daylight hours in two surveyed cities in the same week in May 2007.

It is apparent from the supplied data that the
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degree
in Mumbai, India was by far higher than Moscow, Russia.

One particular fact highlighted by the figure is that in Mumbai, India, Friday and Sunday bore a striking resemblance in terms of the
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temperature
, occupying with 33 and 29 Celsius
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at 6: 00 and 19: 05
respectively
. With regard to Saturday which witnessed the hottest
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with 34 Celsius
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in the morning and 29 Celsius
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in the evening.

When it
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to Moscow, Russia, there was
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8 and 5 Celsius
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on Friday, compared to 10 and 2 Celsius
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on Saturday at 4: 15 and 22: 00, in turn. At the same time, standing at the highest
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in the sunrise time, at 13 Celsius
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, the
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on Sunday experienced 9 Celsius
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in the sunset time.
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IELTS academic The tables give information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May in 2007. v. 1

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