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The table gives information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May 2017. v.2

The table gives information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May 2017. v. 2
The table shows the temperatures and the time of sunrise and sunset in two different cities during 3 days of a week in May 2017. It is clear to see that average temperatures in Mumbai is higher than ones in Moscow. By contrast, the hours of daylight is longer in Moscow. In terms of temperatures, Mumbai is hotter than Moscow that the highest sunrise temperatures in Mumbai is 34 Celsius degree in Saturday. Friday and Sunday have same sunrise temperatures at 33 degree. And the sunset temperatures in this city do not decreased significantly which maintained at 29 degree in three days. On the other hand, there has a slight increase in sunrise temperatures of Moscow although they are mostly lower than ones in Mumbai. The sunrise temperatures went up from 8 in Friday to 13 degree in Sunday. While the sunset temperatures fluctuated in the period of time. The hours of daylight in Moscow are longer than ones in Mumbai. The reason is the sunrise time in Moscow is earlier, at about 4 a. m and the sunset time is 10 p. m, which is later than 7 p. m in Mumbai.
The table
shows
the
temperatures
and the time of sunrise and
sunset
in two
different
cities during 3 days of a week in May 2017.

It is
clear
to
see
that average
temperatures
in Mumbai is higher than
ones
in Moscow. By contrast, the hours of daylight is longer in Moscow.

In terms of
temperatures
, Mumbai is hotter than Moscow that the highest sunrise
temperatures
in Mumbai is 34 Celsius
degree
in Saturday. Friday and Sunday have same sunrise
temperatures
at 33
degree
. And the
sunset
temperatures
in this city do not decreased
significantly
which maintained at 29
degree
in three days.
On the other hand
, there has a slight increase in sunrise
temperatures
of Moscow although they are
mostly
lower than
ones
in Mumbai. The sunrise
temperatures
went up from 8 in Friday to 13
degree
in Sunday.
While
the
sunset
temperatures
fluctuated in the period of time.

The hours of daylight in Moscow are longer than
ones
in Mumbai. The reason is the sunrise time in Moscow is earlier, at about 4 a. m and the
sunset
time is 10 p. m, which is later than 7 p. m in Mumbai.
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IELTS academic The table gives information on the temperatures and the hours of daylight in two particular cities in the same week in May 2017. v. 2

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