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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. v. 1

The line graph illustrates the mean temperature per month, whereas the table demonstrates the hours of sunshine in average in a year in London, New York and Sydney. Overall, it is clear that although London and New York become warmer but the temperatures start to decrease near the end of the year, the opposite trend is true for Sydney. In January, the temperature in London is higher than New York with figures 8 and around 5 respectively. As the temperatures in both cities continue to rise, the temperature in New York becomes higher than London in middle of March; the figures go up gradually and reach peaks in July (just under 30 and around 23) before showing a downward trend until December with a lower temperature in New York than in London. Turning to Sydney, the temperature starts to decline from January to July and then rises back in the end of the year with the lowest point just above 15. From the table, it is observed that New York has the highest number of hours exposed to the sunshine (2535 hours) and that was slightly higher than that of Sydney (2473 hours). Total hours of sunshine in London was the least and that was 1180 hours.

IELTS academic The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. v.1

The line graph illustrates the mean
temperature
per month, whereas the table demonstrates the
hours
of sunshine in average in a year in London,
New
York and Sydney.
Overall
, it is
clear
that although London and
New
York become warmer
but
the
temperatures
start
to decrease near the
end
of the year, the opposite trend is true for Sydney. In January, the
temperature
in London is higher than
New
York with figures 8 and around 5
respectively
. As the
temperatures
in both cities continue to rise, the
temperature
in
New
York becomes higher than London in middle of March; the figures go up
gradually
and reach peaks in July (
just
under 30 and around 23)
before
showing a downward trend until December with a lower
temperature
in
New
York than in London. Turning to Sydney, the
temperature
starts
to decline from January to July and then rises back in the
end
of the year with the lowest point
just
above 15. From the table, it
is observed
that
New
York has the highest number of
hours
exposed to the sunshine (2535
hours)
and that was
slightly
higher than that of Sydney (2473
hours)
. Total
hours
of sunshine in London was the least and that was 1180
hours
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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3 paragraphs
207 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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