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The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. v.1

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. v. 1
The given tables show data on the consumption of beer and fruit juice in ten different countries. As is presented in the tables, Irish and German people consume the highest amount of beers per person while the Canadian and American people consume the highest amount of fruit juice per person per year. According to the first table, Irish people consume the highest amount of beer per person in a year amounting 155 litres while Finnish took 79 litres per year on an average. German and Australian citizens take more than 100 litres beer each year while they take about 34-38 litre fruit juices per person per year. People of Belgium and Denmark both take 98 litres beer while people of UK, Australia, US, Netherland consume less than 90 litres beer on an average. Finnish people take the least amount of beer on an average amounting 79 litres per person annually. On the other hand, people of these given countries drink fruit juice less than half of the amount they drink the beers. Canadian people drink the largest amount of fruit juice contributing to 52. 6 litres per person annually, while this amount is less than 50 litres for all other countries. New Zealand people consume the least amount of fruit juice each year on an average. In conclusion, people of the given countries drink more beer than fruit juices on an average.
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According to the
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amounting 155
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while Finnish took 79
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. German and Australian citizens take more than 100
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while they take about 34-38
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Netherland
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less than 90
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. Finnish
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the beers. Canadian
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. New Zealand
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In conclusion
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IELTS academic The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. v. 1

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