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The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. v.1

The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. v. 1
The provided graph gives information on the time spent by male and female on household works in Great Britain. As is observed from the graph, female spent more time cooking, cleaning, clothing and child rearing while male spent more time on gardening and odd jobs. According to the graph, female spend more than 200 minutes per day on household works while male spend about 140 minutes per day on those short of household jobs in Great Britain. On an average, female works more on household tasks like cooking, baking, cleaning, washing, house tidying, child caring and sewing. For those short of jobs, women work almost 3 times than the men do. On the contrary, male work more on gardening, pet care, odd job maintaining more than women do and they spend the highest amount of time on gardening and pet caring while the female work their highest amount of time on cooking, cleaning and washing. In conclusion, female work significantly more than men on household works like cooking, washing, cleaning and child nurturing while men spend their majority of time on household works like gardening, pet caring and odd jobs compared to the time they spend on household tasks.
The provided graph gives information on the
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time
spent by male and
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female
on
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household
works in Great Britain. As
is observed
from the graph,
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female
spent more
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time
cooking,
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cleaning
, clothing and child rearing while male spent more
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time
on
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gardening
and odd jobs.

According to the graph,
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female
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spend
more than 200 minutes per day on
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household
works while male
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spend
about 140 minutes per day on those short of
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household
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jobs
in Great Britain. On an average,
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female
works more on
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household
tasks like cooking, baking,
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cleaning
, washing,
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house
tidying, child caring and sewing. For those short of
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jobs
, women
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work
almost 3
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times
than the
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men
do.
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, male
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work
more on
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gardening
, pet care, odd
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job
maintaining more than women
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do and
they
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spend
the highest amount of
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on
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gardening
and pet caring while the
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female
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work
their highest amount of
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time
on cooking,
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cleaning
and washing.

In conclusion
,
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female
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work
significantly
more than
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men
on
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household
works like cooking, washing,
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cleaning
and child nurturing while
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men
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spend
their majority of
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time
on
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household
works like
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gardening
, pet caring and odd
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jobs
compared to the
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time
they
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spend
on
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household
tasks.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. v. 1

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3 paragraphs
199 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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