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The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. v.1

The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. v. 1
The given bar graphs show data on the British people’s full-time and part-time further education from 1970 to 1991. As is presented in the graphs, more men and women were studying full-time than part-time for the given period. Initially, in 1970 and 1971, about 1000 thousand male were in full-time further education and this number decreased to average 850 thousand for 1980 and 1990. On the contrary, this number for part-time students increased over the time though the number was many times lower than the number of people in full-time education. In 1970, almost 100 thousand people were in part-time education and in next 20 years, this number increased to 200 thousand. On the other hand, in 1970, the total number of females who were engaged in full-time education was 700 thousand and this number increased over time and reached to 11000 thousand in 1990/91 which was even higher than the number of males who were in full-time further education in this year. The female part-time students’ number also increased over time and reached to over 200 thousand in 1990 from the initial number of 20 thousand in 1970. In summary, females made progress over their male counterparts in terms of their involvement in full-time and part-time education in Britain for the given period.
The
given
bar graphs
show
data on the British
people
’s full-time and part-time
further
education
from 1970 to 1991. As
is presented
in the graphs, more
men
and women were studying full-time than part-time for the
given
period.

Initially
, in 1970 and 1971, about 1000 thousand male were in full-time
further
education
and this
number
decreased to average 850 thousand for 1980 and 1990.
On the contrary
, this
number
for part-time students
increased
over
the
time
though the
number
was
many
times
lower than the
number
of
people
in full-time
education
. In 1970, almost 100 thousand
people
were in part-time
education
and in
next
20 years, this
number
increased
to 200 thousand.
On the other hand
, in 1970, the total
number
of females who
were engaged
in full-time
education
was 700 thousand and this
number
increased
over
time
and reached to 11000 thousand in 1990/91 which was even higher than the
number
of males who were in full-time
further
education
in this year. The female part-time students’
number
also
increased
over
time
and reached to
over
200 thousand in 1990 from the initial
number
of 20 thousand in 1970.

In summary, females made progress
over
their male counterparts in terms of their involvement in full-time and part-time
education
in Britain for the
given
period.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. v. 1

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