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The table shows the number of mobile phones and personal computers per 1000 people in 2003 in 6 different counties Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The table shows the number of mobile phones and personal computers per 1000 people in 2003 in 6 different counties
The given table illustrates the number of cell phones and computers per 1000 people in 2003 in six different countries, namely- Luxemburg, Italy, Singapore, Germany, South Korea and China. Overall, people of Luxemburg used the highest number of cell phones and PCs. Whereas, Chinese owned the least number of PCs and cell phones. Among all countries, Luxemburg had the most cell phone and PC Owners ( 872 and 900 per 1000 people respectively) compared to China, which had the lowest owner for same electronic device and made up 35 and 88 per thousand people respectively. Italy was following Luxemburg with 737 cell phones and 480 computer user per thousand citizen. However, Singapore had almost same number of computer users and cell phone users, which constituted approximately 700 per thousand people. In terms of mobile owners, Germany and South Korea had lower user compare to other countries, account for 586 and 380 per thousand citizen, except only Chine. In contrast, equal number of personal computer holder were lived in Germany and South Korea with almost half of their number of citizen (452 per thousand).
The
given
table illustrates the
number
of
cell
phones
and computers per 1000
people
in 2003 in six
different
countries,
namely
-
Luxemburg
, Italy, Singapore, Germany, South Korea and China.

Overall
,
people
of
Luxemburg
used
the highest
number
of
cell
phones
and PCs. Whereas, Chinese
owned
the least
number
of PCs and
cell
phones.

Among all countries,
Luxemburg
had the most
cell
phone
and PC Owners
(
872 and 900 per 1000
people
respectively
) compared to China, which had the lowest owner for same electronic device and made up 35 and 88 per thousand
people
respectively
. Italy was following
Luxemburg
with 737
cell
phones
and 480 computer
user
per thousand
citizen
.

However
, Singapore had almost same
number
of computer
users
and
cell
phone
users
, which constituted approximately 700 per thousand
people
. In terms of mobile owners, Germany and South Korea had lower
user
compare to other countries, account for 586 and 380 per thousand
citizen
, except
only
Chine.
In contrast
, equal
number
of personal computer holder were
lived
in Germany and South Korea with almost half of their
number
of citizen (452 per thousand).
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS academic The table shows the number of mobile phones and personal computers per 1000 people in 2003 in 6 different counties

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6.0
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