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The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v.3

The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v. 3
The provided chart represents the average minimum and maximum amount of Sulphur Dioxide and Dmitrous Oxide being disposed daily in various cities in 2000. Overall, Mexico city was the most polluted city with the highest level of both air pollutants. As can be seen from the chart, an equal maximum volume of both S02 and N20 of approximately 200 microgram per m3 was observed m Mexico City, which doubled the minimum amount of around 80 to 100 microgram per m3. Los Angeles was primarily contaminated by N2O, with the minimum and maximum N2O levels being 39 and 104 micrograms per m3 respectively, while the maximum volume of S02 stood at only 10 microgram per m. The second most polluted city was Beijmg where a minimum of 25 microgram per m3 and a maximum of 130 micrograms per m of S02 was recorded on a daily basis, whereas the level of N20 ranged from 14 to 54 units. Air quality m Calcuta was polluted by approximately 47 to 59 microgram per m3 of S02 and 30 to 52 micrograms per m3 of the other air pollutant.
The provided chart represents the average
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minimum
and maximum amount of
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Sulphur
Dioxide and
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Dmitrous
Oxide
being disposed
daily in various
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cities
in 2000.
Overall
,
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Mexico city
was the most polluted city with the highest level of both air pollutants.

As can be
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seen
from the chart, an equal maximum volume of both S02 and N20 of approximately 200
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microgram
per m3
was observed
m Mexico City, which doubled the
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minimum
amount of around 80 to 100
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microgram
per m3. Los Angeles was
primarily
contaminated by N2O, with the
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minimum
and maximum N2O levels being 39 and 104 micrograms per m3
respectively
, while the maximum volume of S02 stood at
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only
10
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microgram
per m.

The second most polluted city was
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Beijmg
where a
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minimum
of 25
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microgram
per m3 and a maximum of 130 micrograms per m of S02
was recorded
on a daily basis, whereas the level of N20 ranged from 14 to 54 units. Air quality m
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Calcuta
was polluted
by approximately 47 to 59
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microgram
per m3 of S02 and 30 to 52 micrograms per m3 of the other air pollutant.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of two air pollutants in four big cities in 2000. v. 3

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