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The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v.2

The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2
The bar graph contains the data of computer ownership of overall population in 2010, and by the various levels of education of 2002 and 2010. The spectacular feature of the chart is accelerating trend shown by the individuals of owning the computer. As is observed from the graph, about 55% populace used an artificial intelligence in 2002 while this trend was surged by approximately 5% in an interval of 2 years and was extensively operated by three-fourth population till 2010. Switching to the possessor of this electronic gadget, about 70% and more graduates and postgraduates held this device whereas this proportion was a bit less than the formers for the pupils who left the college in both years. In addition, around 35% high school graduate kept the same device and this number became twice after 8 years. Last but not least, 40% students who did not possess high school diploma were a proprietor of the computer by 2010. Overall, the elevation in the usage of computer in 2002 was quite fast as contrasted to the 2010.
The bar graph contains the data of computer ownership of
overall
population in 2010, and by the various levels of education of 2002 and 2010. The spectacular feature of the chart is accelerating trend shown by the individuals of owning the computer.

As
is observed
from the graph, about 55% populace
used
an artificial intelligence
in 2002 while this trend
was surged
by approximately 5% in an interval of 2 years and was
extensively
operated by three-fourth population till 2010.

Switching to the possessor of this electronic gadget, about 70% and more graduates and postgraduates held this device whereas this proportion was a bit less than the
formers
for the pupils who
left
the college in both years.
In addition
, around 35% high school graduate
kept
the same device and this number became twice after 8 years. Last
but
not least, 40% students who did not possess high school diploma were a proprietor of the computer by 2010.

Overall
, the elevation in the usage of computer in 2002 was quite
fast
as contrasted to the 2010.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic The graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. v. 2

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