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The table shows source of student income over ten year period in the United KingdomWrite a report a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v.2

The table shows source of student income over ten year period in the United KingdomWrite a report a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2
The table shows the the trend which took place in student income in the United Kingdom during the ten-year period from 1988 to 1999. Even though the data of student loan is not presented in 1988/89, there was a dramatic increase from 8% in 1992/93 to 24% in 1998/99. The percentage of earnings also rose sharply from 6% in 1988/89 and reached the peak at 14% in 1995/96, then fell slightly by 2% in 1998/99. On the other hand, there was a steep fall in parental contribution from 32% in 1988/89 to 16% in 1998/99. At the same time, grant went down by 24% from 38% in 1988/89 to 14% in 1998/99. Overall, the annual income per student rose gradually from 4, 39 pounds in 1988/89 to 5. 75 pounds in 1998/99, and there was a shift from being dependent to independent off the student at that period.
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income in the United Kingdom during the ten-year period from 1988 to 1999.

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loan is not presented in 1988/89, there was a dramatic increase from 8% in 1992/93 to 24% in 1998/99. The percentage of earnings
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sharply
from 6% in 1988/89 and reached the peak at 14% in 1995/96, then fell
slightly
by 2% in 1998/99.

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, there was a steep fall in parental contribution from 32% in 1988/89 to 16% in 1998/99. At the same time, grant went down by 24% from 38% in 1988/89 to 14% in 1998/99.

Overall
, the annual income per
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rose
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39 pounds
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75 pounds
in 1998/99, and there was a shift from being dependent to independent off the
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at that period.
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IELTS academic The table shows source of student income over ten year period in the United KingdomWrite a report a university lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
148 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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