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The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v. 2
The line graph presents how four leading types of farming produce in Mitch ford city over a period of 1970-2000. Firstly, In 1970 wheat was highest types of farming products which produced almost 45 thousand dollar in Mitch ford city and lowest products was cotton which has been stabilized for ten years. Others two product corn and sugar were 30 thousand and 20 thousand respectively. Secondly, after ten years according to the line graph in 1980 cotton has reached his peak position. It' s about 90 thousand dollar and remained until 1980. In terms of sugar it is also increased gradually almost 35 thousand. In case of wheat and corn those products raised slowly too. Finally, between 1990 to 2000 cotton has been dropped sharply and became came down into 1970 dollar rate. But sugar were still increased and matched with wheat at 45 thousand almost. The corn also fell minimally.
The line graph presents how four leading types of farming produce in Mitch ford city over a period of 1970-2000.

Firstly
, In 1970 wheat was
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
types of farming
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products
which produced almost 45 thousand
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dollar
in Mitch ford city and lowest
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products
was cotton which has
been stabilized
for ten years. Others two
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product
corn and sugar were 30 thousand and 20 thousand
respectively
.

Secondly
, after ten years according to the line graph in 1980 cotton has reached his peak position.
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#039; s about 90 thousand
Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: "dollars".
dollar
and remained until 1980. In terms of sugar it is
also
increased
gradually
almost 35 thousand. In case of wheat and corn those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
raised
slowly
too.

Finally
,
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 1990 and 2000".
between 1990 to 2000
cotton has
been dropped
sharply
and became came down into 1970 dollar rate.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
sugar were
still
increased and matched with wheat at 45 thousand almost. The corn
also
fell
minimally
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows the four leading types of farming produce in Mitchford city between 1970-2000. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
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