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The graph and table below shows the changes in the number of overseas visitors and top 5 visitor countries to Britain I 2004 and 2005. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The graph and table below shows the changes in the number of overseas visitors and top 5 visitor countries to Britain I 2004 and 2005. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v. 2
The graph and table provides the differences between 2004 and 2005 the number overseas visitors and top 5 visitor countries to Britain. In 2004 bar graph shows that most visitors came to Britain to visit in December month, which is the highest visitors month of the year. It is almost 800 thousand peoples and the lowest month was March almost 450 thousand travelers. In other hand, in 2005 the highest visitors month was still December but less than last year. It was only 700 thousand peoples. The lowest visitor season was at September 300 thousand only. In case of overall year, in 2004 almost 600 thousand peoples visitors visited in Britain every month in average. However, in 2005 it was 100 thousand less, only 500 thousand peoples. According to the table Japan was the highest country visited in Britain in 2004 and lowest country was South Korea. Other country were Australia, USA and China are 2nd, 3rd and 4th position respectively. In 2005 Australia became the highest visitors country with 2% change rate and lowest country was India with 13% change rate. In term of USA this country stabilized same position but increased 2% change. In case of Japan they declined 2nd position with -3% change.
The graph and table provides the differences between 2004 and 2005 the number overseas
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visitors
and top 5
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visitor
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countries
to Britain.

In 2004 bar graph
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shows
that most
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visitors
came to Britain to visit in December
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month
, which is the highest
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visitors
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month
of the year. It is almost 800 thousand peoples and the
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lowest
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month
was March almost 450 thousand travelers. In other hand, in 2005 the highest
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visitors
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month
was
still
December
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but
less than last year. It was
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only
700 thousand peoples. The
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lowest
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visitor
season was at September 300 thousand
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only
. In case of
overall
year, in 2004 almost 600 thousand peoples
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visitors
visited in Britain every
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month
in average.
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, in 2005 it was 100 thousand less,
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only
500 thousand peoples.

According to the table Japan was the highest
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country
visited in Britain in 2004 and
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lowest
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country
was South Korea. Other
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country
were Australia, USA and China are 2nd, 3rd and 4th position
respectively
. In 2005 Australia became the highest
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visitors
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country
with 2%
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change
rate and
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lowest
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country
was India with 13%
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change
rate. In term
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stabilized same position
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increased 2%
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IELTS academic The graph and table below shows the changes in the number of overseas visitors and top 5 visitor countries to Britain I 2004 and 2005. Summarize the following information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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