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The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below. v.3

The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below. v. 3
The pie chart illustrates, the account of income from six various financial divisions in 2003 and together with the amount of income from fishing in Moroccos during the year of 1982 and 2003. Overall, the main source of financial set up in given country by tourism. Likewise, the least source of economic section was agriculture in the year of 2003. As figured in the chart, tourism department makes up Moroccos income to 26% which is two percentage higher in contrast to industry which is 24%. Moreover, the amount of income from workers remittance also had a significant sector of income which is 21% in 2003 Regarding petroleum and fishing was the another category of economic section which was considerably similar or small percentage difference such as, 14% and 13 % respectively. Furthermore, agriculture division represents, mere 2% income in Moroccow over the period given.
The pie chart illustrates, the account of
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income
from six various financial divisions in 2003 and together with the amount of
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income
from fishing in
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Moroccos
during the year of 1982 and 2003.

Overall
, the main source of financial set up in
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given
country by tourism.
Likewise
, the least source of economic section was agriculture in the year of 2003.

As figured in the chart, tourism department
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makes
up
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Moroccos
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income
to 26% which is two percentage higher
in contrast
to industry which is 24%.
Moreover
, the amount of
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income
from workers remittance
also
had a significant sector of
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income
which is 21% in 2003

Regarding petroleum and fishing was the another category of economic section which was
considerably
similar or
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small
percentage difference such as, 14% and 13 %
respectively
.
Furthermore
, agriculture division represents, mere 2%
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income
in
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Moroccow
over the period
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given
.
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IELTS academic The chart below shows Morocco’s income from different economic sectors in 2003 as well as its income from fishing from 1982 to 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the charts below. v. 3

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4 paragraphs
144 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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