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The table shows source of student income over a five-year period in the United States. Write a report for a college lecturer describing the information shown below. v.2

The table shows source of student income over a five-year period in the United States. Write a report for a college lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2
The data shows the main sources of income for students in America from 2010-2015. A clear rising trend can be observed for students’ loans and student earnings over the 5 year period, whereas parental contribution and grant aid have both dropped. Student total income rose overall by over US$2000; from US$9, 153 in 2010/11 to US$11, 563 in 2014/15. Student bank loans in 2010/11 comprised only 6% of total student income and student earnings were only 10% in 2010/11. By 2014/15, student loans had increased dramatically to 29% of total income and student earnings from jobs had similarly experienced a significant rise to 30% over the same period. In contrast, in 2010/11, grants were the main source of student income (52%) and this drastically fell over the 5 year period to a mere 16% in 2015. Parental contribution suffered a less dramatic decline, but saw a reduction from 32% in 2010 to 25% in 2015. In conclusion, the figures indicate that students have taken on more responsibility in paying for their education and the government and parents play less of a financially supportive role.
The data
shows
the main sources of
income
for
students
in America from 2010-2015. A
clear
rising trend can
be observed
for
students’
loans and
student
earnings
over
the
5 year
period, whereas parental contribution and grant aid have both dropped.
Student
total
income
rose
overall
by
over
US$2000; from US$9, 153 in 2010/11 to US$11, 563 in 2014/15.

Student bank loans in 2010/11 comprised
only
6% of total
student
income
and
student
earnings were
only
10% in 2010/11. By 2014/15,
student
loans had increased
dramatically
to 29% of total
income
and
student
earnings from jobs had
similarly
experienced a significant rise to 30%
over
the same period.

In contrast
, in 2010/11, grants were the main source of
student
income
(52%) and this
drastically
fell
over
the
5 year
period to a mere 16% in 2015. Parental contribution suffered a less dramatic decline,
but
saw
a reduction from 32% in 2010 to 25% in 2015.

In conclusion
, the figures indicate that
students
have taken on more responsibility in paying for their education and the
government
and parents play less of a
financially
supportive role.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The table shows source of student income over a five-year period in the United States. Write a report for a college lecturer describing the information shown below. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
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