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the table shows how many people used different form public transport in million between 2010 and 2014. v.2

the table shows how many people used different form public transport in million between 2010 and 2014. v. 2
The given table depict the ratio of people who used distinct public transport from 2010 to 2014. The data is calibrated in million. The most striking feature to be observed is that matro was the most prevalent transport among people. It can be vividly seen that in, In 2010 the total number of passengers were 7. 3 million who used all types of transport system whereas the ratio was doubled in 2014 with 14 million people. The proportion of people were equally reported for trains and buses with 1. 8 million people in 2012. Turning to the rest of description, the figure of metro and trains rising slightly from 3 million to 5 million and 1. 4 million to 3. 6 million. As far as comparison is concerned the cabs stood at lowest position for transportation by masses compare to other public transport. Further, in case of trams, the number of rise slowly for the next three years than other public transport vehicle.
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table depict the ratio of
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people
who
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used
distinct public
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transport
from 2010 to 2014. The data
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in
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million
.

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The
most striking feature to
be observed
is that
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matro
was the most prevalent
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transport
among
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people
.

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vividly
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seen
that in, In 2010 the total number of passengers were 7. 3
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million
who
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used
all types of
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transport
system whereas the ratio
was doubled
in 2014 with 14
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million
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people
. The proportion of
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people
were
equally
reported for trains and buses with 1. 8
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million
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people
in 2012.

Turning to the rest of description, the figure of metro and trains rising
slightly
from 3
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million
to 5
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million
and 1. 4
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million
to 3. 6
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million
. As far as comparison
is concerned
the cabs stood at lowest position for transportation by masses compare to other public
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transport
.
Further
, in case of trams, the number of rise
slowly
for the
next
three years than other public
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transport
vehicle.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic the table shows how many people used different form public transport in million between 2010 and 2014. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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