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The charts below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparis v.2

The charts below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989
The bar chart illustrates, compared with the average prices to buy a house in 1989, the price changes of houses on the average in five major cities during two measured periods (1990-1995 and 1996-2002). Overall, besides Frankfurt, the house prices in other cities all experienced an upward trend throughout the surveyed period. First of all, the number of cities that had a higher average housing price than that in 1989 grew from 2 to 4 during the 12 years. To be more specific, the most striking change can be viewed in London’s house price as it soared from 17% lower than the figure in reference year to 11% higher than that in 1989. The house price change in New York took the second place, which dramatically rose its percentage from 95% to 105% when compared with the basic statistic in 1989. As for Madrid and Tokyo, their prices of house also went up but in a less significant way, with the price in Madrid rose 3% (from 101% to 104%) and Tokyo increased 2% (from 93% to 95%) respectively. By contrast, with the only declined ratio, the housing price in Frankfurt slightly dropped 1% (from 102% to 101%) during the surveyed time.
The bar chart illustrates, compared with the average
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in 1989, the
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on the average in five major cities during two measured periods (1990-1995 and 1996-2002).
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Frankfurt, the
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in other cities all experienced an upward trend throughout the surveyed period.

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, the number of cities that had a higher average housing
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than that in 1989 grew from 2 to 4 during the 12 years. To be more specific, the most striking
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can
be viewed
in London’s
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house
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price
as it soared from 17% lower than the figure in reference year to 11% higher than that in 1989. The
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house
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in New York took the second place, which
dramatically
rose its percentage from 95% to 105% when compared with the basic statistic in 1989.

As for Madrid and Tokyo, their
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of
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also
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in a less significant way, with the
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in Madrid rose 3% (from 101% to 104%) and Tokyo increased 2% (from 93% to 95%)
respectively
. By contrast, with the
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declined ratio, the housing
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in Frankfurt
slightly
dropped 1% (from 102% to 101%) during the surveyed time.
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IELTS academic The charts below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989

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