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The graph below shows the average class size in six countries and compares it with the world average class size in 2006 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main points and give comparisons where relevant v.2

The graph below shows the average class size in six countries and compares it with the world average class size in 2006
The bar chart illustrates the comparison of the class size between primary school and lower secondary school in six countries (South Korea, Japan, the UK, Denmark, Mexico and Iceland) in 2006. Overall, it is apparent that South Korea had the highest percentage of children in primary school and lower secondary school, whereas Iceland had the lowest percentage of children. In primary school, the percentage of children whose age between 5 and 10 was about about 34% in South Korea. The proportion of the children was roughly 25%, which as slightly higher than the world average children in primary school. The proportion of the UK, Denmark and Mexico remained between 21% and 23%. Iceland had the least percentage of students, precisely 15%. On the other hand, in South Korea, about 36% of the children studied in lower secondary school, while in Japan and Mexico, this proportion was the same, which was about 31%. In the UK, Denmark and Mexico, the percentage of 13 to 16 years of old children comprised around 23%, which was about 2% lower than the world average children. Iceland again remained the lowest percentage of students in lower secondary school (approximately 17%).
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in six countries (South Korea, Japan, the UK, Denmark, Mexico and Iceland) in 2006.

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, whereas Iceland had the lowest
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34% in South Korea. The proportion of the
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. The proportion of the UK, Denmark and Mexico remained between 21% and 23%. Iceland had the least
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, while in Japan and Mexico, this proportion was the same, which was about 31%. In the UK, Denmark and Mexico, the
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comprised around 23%, which was about 2% lower than the world average
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. Iceland again remained the lowest
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(approximately 17%).
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the average class size in six countries and compares it with the world average class size in 2006

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