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The table below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. You should write at least 150 words v.1

The table below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 1
The table illustrates the grams of CO2 emission per European passenger for various means of transports while the pie chart describes European Union spending on transport. As can be seen from the diagram, air transport by far emitted the highest gram of CO2 per person and the EU spends the most of roads and railways. According to the bar chart, the grams of CO2 per person exhaled by flying in air stands at 355, approximately three times as much as cars which are the next largest producers. Buses cam next with more than 50 grams of CO2. The lowest gram of CO2 per passenger is emitted by coaches with just under 50 while maritime and rail stands at the same level of 50. The highest percentage of funds is spent on Roads with 52%. Railways are not far behind with just above 3 out of 10 while public transport is spent three time less. The remaining 7% comes from intermodal, inland waterway, ports, airports and unknown with 2% or less each.
The table illustrates the
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grams
of CO2 emission per European passenger for various means of
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transports
while the pie chart
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describes
European Union spending on
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transport
. As can be
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seen
from the diagram, air
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transport
by far emitted the highest
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gram
of CO2 per person and the EU spends the
After 'most of', you should use 'the' ("most of the roads") or simply say "most roads".
most of roads
and railways.

According to the bar chart, the
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grams
of CO2 per person exhaled by flying in air stands at 355, approximately three times as much as cars which are the
next
largest producers. Buses cam
next
with more than 50
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grams
of CO2. The lowest
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gram
of CO2 per passenger
is emitted
by coaches with
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just
under 50 while maritime and rail stands at the same level of 50.

The highest percentage of funds
is spent
on Roads with 52%. Railways are not far behind with
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just
above 3 out of 10 while public
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transport
is spent
three time less. The remaining 7%
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comes
from intermodal, inland waterway, ports, airports and unknown with 2% or less each.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below shows CO2 emissions for different forms of transport in the European Union. The Pie Chart shows the percentage of European Union funds being spent on different forms of transport. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
171 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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