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The table below gives information about student enrolements at Manchester university in 1937, 1967 and 2017. v.2

The table below gives information about student enrolements at Manchester university in 1937, 1967 and 2017. v. 2
The information about pupils enrolement at Menchester university in three 1937, 1967 and 2017 has been depicted by given table. One glance is enough to make it clear that maximum percenthum of students had came from other countries however proportion of people who got admission in university had increased from first year to last. It is clear that in the year of 1937, 327 students were studied in university with 45% of girls and 55% boys and over a half percentage of people came from under 40 miles while only 6% of students were came from 4 countries. From1967 to 2017, there was a big increase in the proportion of students with 1133 and 6254 respectively. however in 1967 percentage of boys was higher than girls but in 2017 girls percenthum was witnessed at 55%. and it is noticeabled that only 1-2% pupils were came from under 40miles because majority of people belongs to other countries(32%).
The information about pupils
enrolement
at
Menchester
university in three 1937, 1967 and 2017 has
been depicted
by
given
table.

One glance is
enough
to
make
it
clear
that maximum
percenthum
of
students
had
came
from other countries
however
proportion of
people
who
got
admission in university had increased from
first
year to last.

It is
clear
that in the year of 1937, 327
students
were studied
in university with 45% of girls and 55% boys and over a half percentage of
people
came
from under
40 miles
while
only
6% of
students
were
came
from 4 countries.

From1967 to 2017, there was a
big
increase in the proportion of
students
with 1133 and 6254
respectively
.
however
in 1967 percentage of boys was higher than girls
but
in 2017 girls
percenthum
was witnessed
at 55%.
and
it is
noticeabled
that
only
1-2% pupils were
came
from under
40miles
because
majority of
people
belongs to other countries(32%).
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about student enrolements at Manchester university in 1937, 1967 and 2017. v. 2

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156 words
6.0
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