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The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008. v.2

The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008. v. 2
The line graph compares the number of visitors who visited Caryl Island in the period of eight years, from 2000 to 2008 with the data given in two yearly increments. Overall, the number of visitors to the island divided into two categories: first time visitors and returning visitors, increased significantly over the period given. In 200, the amount of first time visitors was approximately 8000 per year, compared with only about 3000 visitors who came back the destination. By contrast, in 2002, that trend reversed with 10000 returning visitors, higher than 4000 visitors for the first time. Between 2002 and 2006, there was a dramatic increase in both categories. The figure of returning visitors reached the peak at more than 14000 and the combined total of visitors was at about 24000 people. In 2008, while the number of people who visited for the first time grow continually, those who coming Caryl Island for additional visits fell down and finished at more than 13000 visitors each year.
The line graph compares the number of
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Caryl
Island in the period of eight years, from 2000 to 2008 with the data
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in two yearly increments.

Overall
, the number of
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visitors
to the island divided into two categories:
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first
time
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visitors
and returning
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visitors
, increased
significantly
over the period
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given
.

In 200, the amount of
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first
time
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visitors
was approximately 8000 per year, compared with
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only
about 3000
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visitors
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who
came back the destination. By contrast, in 2002, that trend reversed with 10000 returning
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visitors
, higher than 4000
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visitors
for the
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first
time.

Between 2002 and 2006, there was a dramatic increase in both categories. The figure of returning
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visitors
reached the peak at more than 14000 and the combined total of
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visitors
was at about 24000
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people
. In 2008, while the number of
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people
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who
visited for the
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first
time grow
continually
, those
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coming
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Caryl
Island for additional visits fell down and finished at more than 13000
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visitors
each year.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The line graph shows the number of first time visitors and returning visitors who visited Caryl Island from 2000 to 2008. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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