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The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. v.1

The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. v. 1
The table compares the expense ratios of grown up and younger English on four items proportionate to their earning in 2005. Overall, adult UK residents spent most percentages of their income on food and electronic devices while children’s expenditure was mostly for music and video. To illustrate, an average adult English spent over one-fourth of the income on food in 2005 while 15 percent of the income went on purchasing electronic devices. Their spending on music and video were quite low, only 4% and 2% respectively. Interestingly, men spent 21% of their earning on electronic gadgets, which was exactly treble than that of women. However, women spent more on food and slightly higher on music. But their expenditure on videos was almost ignorable proportionate to their income. Children, on the other hand, spent only around one-tenth of their income on food while a large ratio on music and electronic tools, 41 and 35 percentages consecutively. Youngsters expense proportion on video was much higher than that of adults, more than 7 times to be more precise. Among those children, boys spent most proportion of their income on video and electronics, 20 and 28 percentages sequentially, while girls preferred more ratio on food and music.
The table compares the expense ratios of grown up and younger English on four items proportionate to their earning in 2005.
Overall
, adult UK residents
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spent
most percentages of their
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income
on
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food
and
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electronic
devices while children’s expenditure was
mostly
for
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music
and video.

To illustrate, an average adult English
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spent
over one-fourth of the
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income
on
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food
in 2005 while 15 percent of the
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income
went on purchasing
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electronic
devices. Their spending on
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music
and
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video
were quite low,
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only
4% and 2%
respectively
.
Interestingly
,
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men
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spent
21% of their earning on
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electronic
gadgets, which was exactly
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treble
than that of women.
However
, women
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spent
more on
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food
and
slightly
higher on
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music
.
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But
their expenditure on
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videos
was almost ignorable proportionate to their income.

Children,
on the other hand
,
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spent
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only
around one-tenth of their
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income
on
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food
while a large ratio on
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music
and
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electronic
tools, 41 and 35 percentages
consecutively
. Youngsters expense proportion on
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video
was much higher than that of adults, more than 7 times to be more precise. Among those children, boys
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spent
most proportion of their
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income
on
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video
and electronics, 20 and 28 percentages
sequentially
, while girls preferred more ratio on
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food
and
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music
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS academic The table data shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items in the United Kingdom in 2005. v. 1

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