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The line graph below shows the cases of diseases caused by X virus in Australia from 1960 to 1995. v.1

The line graph below shows the cases of diseases caused by X virus in Australia from 1960 to 1995. v. 1
The line graph gives data on the X virus diseases reported from 1960 to 1995 in Australia. The horizontal line presents years while the vertical line shows the number of reported cases. Overall, the highest number of X virus-related incidents occurred from 1975 to 1080 in Australia and after 1990, this virus could not cause any more illness in Australia. As can be seen in the illustration, the number of affected people from the X virus stood at only 50 in 1960 and in the next 10 years, it gradually increased. Two hundred people were infected in 1970 and afterwards, the fatality sharply increased and reached a peak, at 500 cases in 1975. This number remained stable over the next 5 years and then decreased by 100 in 1985. However, the recorded illness due to this virus in the next 5 years slumped, and in 1990, not a single case of X virus-related disease was found in Australia. During the last five years, from 1990 to 1995, no one was reported to become sick from the attack of this virus in Australia.
The line graph gives data on the X
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virus
diseases reported from 1960 to 1995 in Australia. The horizontal line presents years while the vertical line
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shows
the
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number
of reported cases.

Overall
, the highest
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number
of X virus-related incidents occurred from 1975 to 1080 in Australia and after 1990, this
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virus
could not cause any more illness in Australia.

As can be
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seen
in the illustration, the
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number
of
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affected
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people
from the X
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virus
stood at
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only
50 in 1960 and in the
next
10 years, it
gradually
increased. Two hundred
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people
were infected
in 1970 and afterwards, the fatality
sharply
increased and reached a peak, at 500 cases in 1975. This
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number
remained stable over the
next
5 years and then decreased by 100 in 1985.
However
, the recorded illness due to this
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virus
in the
next
5 years slumped, and in 1990, not a single case of X virus-related disease
was found
in Australia. During the last five years, from 1990 to 1995, no one
was reported
to become sick from the attack of this
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virus
in Australia.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the cases of diseases caused by X virus in Australia from 1960 to 1995. v. 1

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