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The table below shows the percentage of journey by different means in 4 countries and the bar graph shows the reasons for Canadian people to use a car to reach their workplace. v.2

The table below shows the percentage of journey by different means in 4 countries and the bar graph shows the reasons for Canadian people to use a car to reach their workplace. v. 2
The table compares the types of transports used in four countries – Canada, Belgium, Germany and Netherlands while the bar graph presents data why Canadians prefer personal cars to reach their offices. Getting back to the details, cars are the most preferred mode of transportations in all the four given countries and the percentages of tours made by citizens in these countries by cars ranged from 47 in Netherlands and 90 in Canada. In Netherlands, a high proportion of trips are made by bicycle, more than one-fourth, and on foot, 18%. The highest percentage of public transport is used by German and that comprise 18% of their total journey. The bar chart, on the other hand, explains why Canadians prefer cars to commute to their office. Interestingly, the majority of the Canadians (38%) use cars to reach offices since they do not have any alternative. A sizable percentage said using cars is more convenient (12%). Other factors listed seems like more related to people’s need than preference as working at night shift and work related needs.
The table compares the types of transports
used
in four countries
Canada, Belgium, Germany and Netherlands while the bar graph presents data why Canadians prefer personal
cars
to reach their offices.

Getting back to the
details
,
cars
are the most preferred mode of transportations in all the four
given
countries and the percentages of tours made by citizens in these countries by
cars
ranged from 47
in Netherlands
and 90 in Canada.
In Netherlands
, a high proportion of trips
are made
by bicycle, more than one-fourth, and on foot, 18%. The highest percentage of public transport is
used
by German and that comprise 18% of their total journey.

The bar chart,
on the other hand
,
explains
why Canadians prefer
cars
to commute to their office.
Interestingly
, the majority of the Canadians (38%)
use
cars
to reach offices since they do not have any alternative. A sizable percentage said using
cars
is more convenient (12%). Other factors listed seems like more related to
people
’s need than preference as working at night shift and work related needs.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage of journey by different means in 4 countries and the bar graph shows the reasons for Canadian people to use a car to reach their workplace. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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