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The bar graphs below show the Riverdale Public School’s spending per student in a year as well as percentages of students who passed the reading and math tests from 1990 to 2005. v.1

The bar graphs below show the Riverdale Public School’s spending per student in a year as well as percentages of students who passed the reading and math tests from 1990 to 2005. v. 1
The first bar graph shows yearly spending for each pupil in Riverdale public school from 1990 to 2010 while the second graph shows the percentages of students from the same school who passed in reading and math tests during the same period of time. As can be seen, yearly spending for each pupil in Riverdale School decreased over the time and the percentage of pupils who passed the tests has also dropped. According to the illustration, Riverdale school spent 12 thousand dollars for each student in 1990 and that was higher than the spending on per student in any other given year. The spending fell to around ten thousand dollars in the next year and it further dropped to nearly 9 thousand in 2000. After five years the amount spent decreased to precisely 8 thousand and finally in 2010, the school authority’s cost for each student was roughly 7 thousand dollar. The second bar graph shows that the percentages of students in Riverdale school who passed the reading and math test kept on declining over the time. In 1990, approximately 87% pupils passed these tests while in 2000 this percentage dropped to 85%. Finally, 82% secured their pass score in these tests in 2010 which was a 5% drop from the initial percentage of students who got the pass marks.
The
first
bar graph
shows
yearly
spending
for each
pupil
in Riverdale public
school
from 1990 to 2010 while the second graph
shows
the
percentages
of
students
from the same
school
who
passed
in reading and math
tests
during the same period of time. As can be
seen
, yearly
spending
for each
pupil
in Riverdale
School
decreased over the time and the
percentage
of
pupils
who
passed
the
tests
has
also
dropped.

According to the illustration, Riverdale
school
spent 12 thousand dollars for each
student
in 1990 and that was higher than the
spending
on per
student
in any other
given
year. The
spending
fell to around ten thousand dollars in the
next
year and it
further
dropped to
nearly
9 thousand in 2000. After five years the amount spent decreased to
precisely
8 thousand and
finally
in 2010, the
school
authority’s cost for each
student
was roughly 7 thousand
dollar
.

The second bar graph
shows
that the
percentages
of
students
in Riverdale
school
who
passed
the reading and math
test
kept
on declining over the time. In 1990, approximately 87%
pupils
passed
these
tests
while in 2000 this
percentage
dropped to 85%.
Finally
, 82% secured their pass score in these
tests
in 2010 which was a 5% drop from the initial
percentage
of
students
who
got
the pass marks.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar graphs below show the Riverdale Public School’s spending per student in a year as well as percentages of students who passed the reading and math tests from 1990 to 2005. v. 1

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
220 words
6.5
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