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The table below gives information about online shopping in one year on UK. It shows the amount of money spent on various items by men and women and the percentages for men and women on the total money spent on those items. v.2

The table below gives information about online shopping in one year on UK. It shows the amount of money spent on various items by men and women and the percentages for men and women on the total money spent on those items. v. 2
The provided table compared how much money was used in buying ten categories of products by men and women from the internet in England, as well as the percentage each gender takes in the total market. Overall, health and beauty products take up the least money for both males and females, while electrical goods and groceries are the most popular items for them respectively. Also, it is not surprising that ladies took the lead in buying groceries, furniture and floor coverings, health and beauty goods, clothing and foot wears, home wares and books, whereas, men are leading in the remaining groups. Lastly, men spend more money in total than women on e-market. The sum of 762. 9 millions was spent on groceries by women, while surprisingly just 81. 8 millions was used in buying health and beauty products. For men however, their biggest expense goes to electrical goods, with a whooping 829. 6 millions; the highest money spent on online shopping all through. 69. 2% of women' s spending is on groceries, while 71. 9% for men' s is on electrical goods.
The provided table compared how much
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from the internet in England,
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for both males and females, while electrical
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and groceries are the most popular items for them
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, clothing and foot wears, home wares and books, whereas,
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are leading in the remaining groups.
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spend more
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in total than
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on e-market.

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, while
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spent on online shopping all through. 69. 2% of
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IELTS academic The table below gives information about online shopping in one year on UK. It shows the amount of money spent on various items by men and women and the percentages for men and women on the total money spent on those items. v. 2

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3 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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