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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006, 2007 and 2014. v.1

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006, 2007 and 2014. v. 1
The table compares the percentages of market share by different laptop brands in three different years – 2006, 2007 and 2014. A glance at the graph reveals that HP was the leading notebook manufacturer in these years. As can be seen in the table, HP had the largest market share of laptops in 2006 and it retained the top position in 2007 and 2014 as well with around one-third of the total market. Dell secured the second position with 16. 6% market share in 2006 and enjoyed a 10% increase in 2014. Samsung had only 11. 6% share of laptop market in 2006 but this brand managed to capture over 14% global market share in 8 years. All the top three brands of laptop manufacturing had been able to increase their market share except Samsung in 2007. Toshiba and Lenovo had around 6 percent notebook market share in 2006 and in 8 years their market share increased slightly. The lowest market share was possessed by Fujitsu in 2006 and after 8 years its market share slightly declined and reached to 3. 1%. All other brands captured a significant market share in 2006 (22. 8%) but only 7. 11% in 2014.
The table compares the percentages of
market
share
by
different
laptop
brands
in three
different
years
2006, 2007 and 2014. A glance at the graph reveals that HP was the leading notebook manufacturer in these years.

As can be
seen
in the table, HP had the largest
market
share
of
laptops
in 2006 and it retained the top position in 2007 and 2014
as well
with around one-third of the total
market
. Dell secured the second position with 16. 6%
market
share
in 2006 and enjoyed a 10% increase in 2014. Samsung had
only
11. 6%
share
of
laptop
market
in 2006
but
this
brand
managed to capture over 14% global
market
share
in 8 years. All the top three
brands
of
laptop
manufacturing had been able to increase their
market
share
except Samsung in 2007. Toshiba and Lenovo had around 6 percent notebook
market
share
in 2006 and in 8 years their
market
share
increased
slightly
. The lowest
market
share
was possessed
by Fujitsu in 2006 and after 8 years its
market
share
slightly
declined and reached to 3. 1%. All other
brands
captured a significant
market
share
in 2006 (22. 8%)
but
only
7. 11% in 2014.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006, 2007 and 2014. v. 1

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