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the table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in official building on a typical weekday v.2

the table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in official building on a typical weekday v. 2
the table illustrates the coffee shop on a typical weekday in four times around 07: 30 PM to 08: 30 AM. it is evident coffee was the best order in the morning which is 265 customers on average has at least 150 more higher than tea, and pastries was 275 in the morning more than quarter from sandwich. 10: 30 to 02: 30 is also ahead in customers value, with 185 order coffee and 200 sandwich. On the afternoon, however, coffee as drink are almost equal value with pastries as food higher than tea and sandwich. meanwhile, in the evening coffee was 200, almost half than tea which is only 75 and sandwich was 110 higher 90 than pastries. overall, it is clear that the coffee in shop most popular than tea on a weekday, especially for breakfast and dinner. On the other hand, pastries was higher than sandwich for breakfast and lunch, sandwich only poplar in the afternoon.
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the
table illustrates the
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coffee
shop on a typical weekday in four times around 07: 30 PM to 08: 30 AM. it is evident
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coffee
was the best order in the morning which is 265 customers on average has at least 150 more higher than
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tea
, and pastries was 275 in the morning more than quarter from sandwich. 10: 30 to 02: 30 is
also
ahead in customers value, with 185 order
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coffee
and 200
Possible agreement error. The noun 'sandwich' seems to be countable, so consider using: "sandwiches".
sandwich
.

The usual preposition for "afternoon" is 'in' not "on". Try it like this: "in the afternoon".
On the afternoon
,
however
,
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coffee
as drink are almost equal value with pastries as food higher than
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tea
and sandwich.
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meanwhile
, in the evening
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coffee
was 200, almost half than
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tea
which is
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only
75 and sandwich was 110 higher 90 than pastries.

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overall
, it is
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clear
that the
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coffee
in shop most
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popular
than
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tea
on a weekday,
especially
for breakfast and dinner.
On the other hand
, pastries was higher than sandwich for breakfast and lunch, sandwich
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only
poplar in the afternoon.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic the table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in official building on a typical weekday v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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