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The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v.2

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 2
The table shows a typical weekday’s sales of a coffee shop which is located in an office building. It is clear that people purchase more coffee and tea from this restaurant in the morning and evening while they opt for sandwiches during the lunchtime. Analysing the coffee shop’s sales report reveals that people purchase 265 cups of coffee and 110 cups of tea in the early morning and 200 cups of coffee and 75 cups of tea in the evening from this coffee shop. In the noontime, the number of sandwich sales quadruples than that in the early morning. The sales of this item in the evening is also far higher than of the 2. 30 to 5. 30 pm. Tea sale is highest in the morning, 110 cups, while the coffee sale is high both in the morning and in the evening. Pastries are sold more in the breakfast time amounting 275 which is more than thrice than the sales in the evening. Finally, people purchase 50 pieces of sandwiches in the early morning and the highest sales could be observed later in the morning till the lunchtime. The sale of sandwiches drops in the later parts of the day.
The table
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sales
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more
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coffee
and
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from this restaurant in the
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morning
and evening while they opt for sandwiches during the lunchtime.

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report reveals that
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265
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cups
of
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coffee
and 110
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of
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tea
in the early
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morning
and 200
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coffee
and 75
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cups
of
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tea
in the evening from this
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shop. In the noontime, the number of sandwich
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sales
quadruples than that in the early
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morning
. The
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sales
of this item in the evening is
also
far higher than of the 2. 30 to 5. 30 pm.
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Tea
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is highest in the
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, 110
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, while the
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coffee
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sale
is high both in the
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morning
and in the evening. Pastries
are sold
more in the breakfast time amounting 275 which is more than thrice than the
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sales
in the evening.
Finally
,
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50 pieces of sandwiches in the early
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morning
and the highest
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could
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later in the
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till the lunchtime. The
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of sandwiches drops in the later parts of the day.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 2

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
201 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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