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The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v.3

The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 3
The given illustration presents data on the sales volume in a coffee shop on a weekend based on four different time-slots. As can be seen from the given table data, the shop sold four items - coffee, tea, pastries and sandwiches and the sales of these foods and drinks varied based on the time of the day but coffee sold exceeded the sales of any other item. It is obvious that early morning (7: 3 am to 10. 30 am) and evening (5. 30 pm to 8: 30 pm) are the time people preferred to have a cup of coffee as the 265 and 200 coffee sales in these two time-slots indicate. The restaurant sold around 800 cups of coffee which was almost 3 times higher than the tea sales in this very shop. Interestingly, demands for tea and coffee in the noon were far less. Besides, the highest pastry sale was in the early morning with 275 sale volume and this was the highest sale unit on this day. Sales volume of no other item on that day went beyond 275. Despite the high demand for pastries in the early morning, it decreased in other times of the day. Finally, sandwiches were bought more in the lunchtime than any other period of the day. 200 sandwiches were sold in the noon alone while the combined sale volume of it in the rest of the day was even less than that.
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given
illustration presents data on the
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sales
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volume
in a
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coffee
shop on a weekend based on four
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different
time-slots. As can be
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seen
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table data, the shop sold four items
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coffee
, tea, pastries and sandwiches and the
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sales
of these foods and drinks varied based on the
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time
of the day
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but
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coffee
sold exceeded the
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sales
of any
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other
item.

It is obvious that early morning (7: 3 am to 10. 30 am) and evening (5. 30 pm to 8: 30 pm) are the
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time
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people
preferred to have a cup of
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coffee
as the 265 and 200
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coffee
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sales
in these two time-slots indicate. The restaurant sold around
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800 cups
of
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coffee
which was almost 3
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times
higher than the tea
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sales
in this
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shop.
Interestingly
, demands for tea and
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coffee
in the noon were far less.
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, the highest pastry
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sale
was in the early morning with 275
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sale
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volume
and this was the highest
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sale
unit on this day.
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Sales
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volume
of no
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other
item on that day went beyond 275. Despite the high demand for pastries in the early morning, it decreased in
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other
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times
of the day.
Finally
, sandwiches were
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bought
more in the lunchtime than any
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other
period of the day. 200 sandwiches
were sold
in the noon alone while the combined
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sale
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volume
of it in the rest of the day was even less than that.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. v. 3

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
241 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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