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The table below shows the sales made by a cofee shop in an office building an a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reportig rhe main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The table below shows the sales made by a cofee shop in an office building an a typical weekday.
The table below illustrates the sales made by a coffee shop in typical weekday in an office building. Overall, it can be seen that the greatest change and fluctuation was in the either three and four hours of workaday. Moreover, coffee is the highest achievement in seliing. In contrast, tea has a few consumer in this store. In the first three hours, coffee stand handles 700 order by buyer for 265 coffee, 110 tea, 275 pastries and 50 sandwiches. In the next season of four hours, employee execute more commission than the earlier time for 430 among others 200 sandwiches as the most ordered. Following this, coffee in the second popular to be reserved which got 185. Beside that, tea and pastries has a slight interested in this moments finish at 50 and 95 ordering. In the next six of clock, all of carte at this coffee stall go through up and reach over for 735 customer. coffee are favourites for them rather than times before at 345, next there 230 pastries sold, sandwich in third position which extended of 150, ultimately, tea is the extremely lower menus are sold.
The table below illustrates the sales made by a
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coffee
shop in typical weekday in an office building.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the greatest
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change
and fluctuation was in the either three and four hours of workaday.
Moreover
,
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coffee
is the highest achievement in
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seliing
.
In contrast
,
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tea
has a
Possible agreement error. The noun consumer seems to be countable; consider using: "few consumers".
few consumer
in this store.

In the
first
three hours,
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coffee
stand
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handles
700 order by buyer for 265
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coffee
, 110
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tea
, 275 pastries and 50 sandwiches.
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In
the
next
season of four hours, employee execute more commission than the earlier time for 430 among others 200 sandwiches as the most ordered. Following this,
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coffee
in the second popular to
be reserved
which
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got
185. Beside that,
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tea
and pastries has a slight interested in
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this
moments finish at 50 and 95 ordering.

In the
next
six of clock,
Consider using "all carte" or "all of the carte".
all of carte
at this
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coffee
stall go through up and reach over for 735
Possible agreement error. The noun 'customer' seems to be countable, so consider using: "customers".
customer
.
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coffee
are
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favourites
for them
rather
than times
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before
at 345,
next
there 230 pastries sold, sandwich in third position which extended of 150,
ultimately
,
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tea
is the
extremely
lower menus
are sold
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the sales made by a cofee shop in an office building an a typical weekday.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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