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The charts below show UK and USA energy comsumption in 2000 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The charts below show UK and USA energy comsumption in 2000 and 2006.
The line graphics show the energy consumption of 2000 and 2006 in uk and U. S. A. Bodily, there was escalation and regression from both of them. In 2000, united kingdom had consume the gumption of oil, coal, gas, nuclear p, other renewable sources. Sequantly, these countries consume for 27%, 29%, 20%, 14%, and 9%. Whereas, in U. S. A which got distinction midst of powers. Chronologically, all of its stood at 37%, 34%, 14%, 5% and 4%. In 2006, U. K there few force dominated such as oil and gas which had 30% and 38%. Over there, the coal, nuclear and other under it finish at 14%, 8%, and 10%. Switch to U. S. A, there some drop and increase usage as well as oil in first position of 40%, and other obtained the lowest for 3% compare to coal, gas, and nuclear which derived of 25%, 25% and 5%. In conclusion, united kingdom and united State had the highest consumption was in premier year and contrast to last season. The most produced of pep achieved by oil and gas from second of times.
The line graphics
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the energy consumption of 2000 and 2006 in
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and U. S. A.
Bodily
, there was escalation and regression from both of them.

In 2000,
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united kingdom
had
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consume
the gumption of
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oil
, coal,
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gas
, nuclear p, other renewable sources.
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Sequantly
, these countries consume for 27%, 29%, 20%, 14%, and 9%.
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, in U. S. A which
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distinction midst of powers.
Chronologically
, all of its stood at 37%, 34%, 14%, 5% and 4%.

In 2006, U. K there
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few force
dominated such as
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oil
and
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gas
which had 30% and 38%. Over there, the coal, nuclear and other under it finish at 14%, 8%, and 10%. Switch to U. S. A, there
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some
drop and increase usage
as well
as
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oil
in
first
position of 40%, and other obtained the lowest for 3% compare to coal,
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gas
, and nuclear which derived of 25%, 25% and 5%.

In conclusion
,
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united kingdom
and united State had the highest consumption was in premier year and contrast to last season. The most produced of pep achieved by
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oil
and
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gas
from second of times.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS academic The charts below show UK and USA energy comsumption in 2000 and 2006.

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4 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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