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The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.2

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010
This graph shows the kinds of activities done by old people in their spare time, covering a period from the 1980s to now in the United States. We can see that generally the activities listed have been increasing in popularity amongst the elderly, with hiking increasing steadily throughout the years, and watching TV being the most popular overall. In the 1980s, nearly all activities were growing in popularity. The only activity which was becoming less popular over these years was going to the theatre. Going to the theatre declined steeply from 50% to 30%. This changed in the 1990s, and going to the theatre became more popular, whereas reading saw a dramatic drop in popularity. The number of people doing all other activities increased. This century, hiking, reading, going to the theatre and surfing the Internet have all been increasing in popularity. However, watching TV has been decreasing in popularity. Despite this, watching TV is still the second most popular activity nowadays amongst this group. Most elderly people are hiking nowadays in their spare time.
This graph
shows
the kinds of
activities
done by
old
people
in their spare time, covering a period from the 1980s to
now
in the United States. We can
see
that
generally
the
activities
listed have been increasing in
popularity
amongst the elderly, with hiking increasing
steadily
throughout the years, and watching TV being the most
popular
overall
.

In the 1980s,
nearly
all
activities
were growing in
popularity
. The
only
activity
which was becoming less
popular
over these years was going to the
theatre
. Going to the
theatre
declined
steeply
from 50% to 30%.

This
changed
in the 1990s, and going to the
theatre
became more
popular
, whereas reading
saw
a dramatic drop in
popularity
. The number of
people
doing all other
activities
increased.

This century, hiking, reading, going to the
theatre
and surfing the Internet have all been increasing in
popularity
.
However
, watching TV has been decreasing in
popularity
. Despite this, watching TV is
still
the second most
popular
activity
nowadays amongst this group. Most elderly
people
are hiking nowadays in their spare time.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
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