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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v.6

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 6
The visual presentation of the table graph enumerated the business in a local restaurant of a downtown district in a week of October. The whole data has been calibrated in dollars. Overall, the restaurant's dinner sales amount was higher than that of lunch and sales during weekends was lower than that of a regular weekday. As is shown in the illustration, in case of lunch sales, Wednesday sales exhibit a higher figure (2595 dollars) than other weekdays. Whilst the restaurant's sale amount on Sunday was the least (1550 dollars). It is interesting to notice that the business in the first two days of the week (Monday and Tuesday) was almost the same, lunch sale accounted for roughly $2400 and dinner sale over $3600. But on Wednesday, dinner sale abruptly decreases to 3445 dollars while lunch generated a slightly more revenue than the previous days. On the 5th day of the week, lunch sales decreased but dinner sale increased. The restaurant's overall sales on Friday was the highest but sales amount on weekends were comparatively lower.
The visual presentation of the table graph enumerated the business in a local restaurant of a downtown district in a week of October. The whole data has
been calibrated
in
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dollars
.
Overall
, the restaurant's
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dinner
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sales
amount was higher than that of lunch and
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sales
during weekends was lower than that of a regular weekday.

As
is shown
in the illustration, in case of lunch
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sales
, Wednesday
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sales
exhibit a higher figure (2595
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dollars)
than other weekdays. Whilst the restaurant's
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sale
amount on Sunday was the least (1550
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dollars)
. It is interesting to notice that the business in the
first
two days of the week (Monday and Tuesday) was almost the same, lunch
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sale
accounted for roughly $2400 and
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dinner
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sale
over $3600.
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But
on Wednesday,
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dinner
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sale
abruptly
decreases to 3445
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dollars
while lunch generated a
slightly
more revenue than the previous days. On the 5th day of the week, lunch
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sales
decreased
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but
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dinner
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sale
increased. The restaurant's
overall
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sales
on Friday was the highest
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but
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sales
amount on weekends were
comparatively
lower.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 6

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
175 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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