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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v.1

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 1
The table shows the sales volume of breakfast, lunch and dinner in a restaurant for seven days, from November 10 to 16 to be more specific. A glance at the data shows that dinner sales amount was higher than that of breakfast and lunch on an average and sales on weekends were comparatively lower. According to the table data, the restaurant sold eleven hundred dollar’s breakfast on Friday. On that day the lunch and dinner sales of the restaurant were $2400 and more than $3600 respectively. On the whole day, the restaurant’s sale accounted for approximately 7 thousand dollars. The next day the sales amount remained almost the same with over 3800 dollar’s dinner sales. The highest amount of breakfast sales in the week was on Thursday and the restaurant sold over 1450 dollar’s breakfast which is almost double than the breakfast sales amount on Sunday. The highest lunch sale was on Wednesday (roughly2600 dollar) and that was more almost double than the sales on Sunday. It is obvious that the sales amount of the restaurant fell on weekends, less than 5 thousand dollars sale on Sunday compared to over eight thousand dollars sales on Friday. Dinner sales in most of the days were higher than the combined breakfast and lunch sales and dinner sales got a hike on Friday with the record 4350 dollars.
The table
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the
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volume of
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, lunch and
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in a
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for seven days, from November 10 to 16 to be more specific. A glance at the data
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that
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was higher than that of
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and lunch on an average and
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on weekends were
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sold eleven hundred
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on Friday. On that day the lunch and
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dinner
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sales
of the
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were $2400 and more than $3600
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.
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accounted for approximately 7 thousand
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. The
next
day the
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remained almost the same with over 3800
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. The highest
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in the week was on Thursday and the
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sold over 1450
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which is almost
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on Sunday.
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highest lunch
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was on Wednesday (roughly2600
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and that was more almost double than the
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on Sunday. It is obvious that the
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of the
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fell on weekends, less than 5 thousand
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on Sunday compared to over eight thousand
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dollars
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on Friday.
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Dinner
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in most of the days were higher than the combined
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and lunch
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and
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a hike on Friday with the record 4350
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2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
225 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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