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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. v.3

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. v. 3
The given table shows data on underground railway system of six cities namely London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles and compares these rail stations opening date, route and passengers number. As is observed from the given data, London underground railway system was established before other railway systems of other cities and they have the largest route for this railroad. But Tokyo railway system has the highest number of passengers per year among the given cities. London railway system was established in 1863, which makes it the oldest underground railway system and it has more than 390 km route which is also the largest route among these six cities. Each year more than 700 million passengers use these underground railway stations of London. Paris underground railway system was started in 1900 and it has almost 200 km route with more than 1190 millions of passengers. Again Tokyo underground railway system has the largest passengers (more than 1900 millions) and it was established in 1927 that has 155 km of route. Kyoto underground railway system was opened in 1981 and it has the smallest route of 11 km and least passengers (45 millions) use this system among the mentioned six cities. Washington Dc and Los Angeles underground railway systems were established in 1976 and 2001 with comparatively smaller routes and few passengers. The Los Angeles underground railway system is the latest railway system in terms of the date it was opened and has the second smallest route (28 km) and passengers (50 millions). In conclusion, the oldest underground railway system is in London and Tokyo has the largest number of passengers of their underground railway system.
The
given
table
shows
data on
underground
railway
system
of six
cities
namely
London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC, Kyoto and Los Angeles and compares these rail stations opening date,
route
and
passengers
number. As
is observed
from the
given
data, London
underground
railway
system
was
established
before
other
railway
systems
of other
cities and
they have the largest
route
for this railroad.
But
Tokyo
railway
system
has the highest number of
passengers
per year among the
given
cities.

London
railway
system
was
established
in 1863, which
makes
it the oldest
underground
railway
system
and it has more than 390 km
route
which is
also
the largest
route
among these six
cities
. Each year more than 700
million
passengers
use
these
underground
railway
stations of London. Paris
underground
railway
system
was
started
in 1900 and it has almost 200 km
route
with more than 1190
millions
of
passengers
. Again Tokyo
underground
railway
system
has the largest
passengers
(more than 1900
millions)
and it was
established
in 1927 that has 155 km of
route
. Kyoto
underground
railway
system
was opened
in 1981 and it has the smallest
route
of 11 km and least
passengers
(45
millions)
use
this
system
among the mentioned six
cities
. Washington Dc and Los Angeles
underground
railway
systems
were
established
in 1976 and 2001 with
comparatively
smaller
routes
and few
passengers
. The Los Angeles
underground
railway
system
is the latest
railway
system
in terms of the date it
was opened
and has the second smallest
route
(28 km) and
passengers
(50 millions).

In conclusion
, the oldest
underground
railway
system
is in London and Tokyo has the largest number of
passengers
of their
underground
railway
system
.
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71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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