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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v.4

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 4
The table shows daily sales at a restaurant in the downtown business district during an October week. The data is split into two parts, first being sale generated for lunch and second for dinner. At the onset, the sale revenue generated during dinner is more than that of lunch and sales amount during weekends is lower when compared to average revenue earned during a typical weekday. The week starts on Monday with revenue of 2400 dollars for the lunch and 3623 for dinner which is more than 50% of revenue realised during the lunchtime. During lunch hours the revenue seems to be showing an increasing trend and reached its peak on Wednesday with $2595. It crashed from there to $2375 on Thursday but regain momentum on Friday with a closing figure of $2500. On the other hand revenue during lunch hours seems to be dwindling throughout the week. Showing an increase on Tuesday and then a fall on Wednesday. But it closed its week with the highest revenue of $4350 on Friday. Weekends tells a different story altogether, revenue which was hovering around $2400 for lunch and around $3600 for dinner, crashed to its lowest point on Sunday with disappointing figures of $1550 & $2450 for lunch and dinner respectively.
The table
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daily
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sales
at a restaurant in the downtown business district during an October
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week
. The data
is split
into two parts,
first
being
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sale
generated for lunch and second for dinner.

At the onset, the
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sale
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revenue
generated during
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dinner
is more than that of lunch and
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sales
amount during weekends is lower when compared to average
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revenue
earned during a typical weekday.

The
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week
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starts
on Monday with
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revenue
of 2400 dollars for the lunch and 3623 for
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dinner
which is more than 50% of
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revenue
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realised
during the lunchtime. During lunch hours the
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revenue
seems to be showing an increasing trend and reached its peak on Wednesday with $2595. It crashed from there to $2375 on Thursday
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but
regain momentum on Friday with a closing figure of $2500.

On the other hand
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revenue
during lunch hours seems to be dwindling throughout the
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week
. Showing an increase on Tuesday and then a fall on Wednesday.
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But
it closed its
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week
with the highest
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revenue
of $4350 on Friday. Weekends
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tells
a
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different
story altogether,
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revenue
which was hovering around $2400 for lunch and around $3600 for
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dinner
, crashed to its lowest point on Sunday with disappointing figures of $1550 & $2450 for lunch and
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dinner
respectively
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 4

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  American English
4 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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