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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v.1

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 1
The given table compares the figures of a research on why 100 thousand of the UK residents visited overseas from 1994 to 1998, and the given bar chart illustrates which countries they travelled during this time. As a whole, the majority of the UK citizens travelled abroad for entertainment, and Western Europe was their most favourable destination. By looking at the table, it can be seen that generally there was a growing tendency for the UK people to travel into other countries from 1994 to 1998. During the second year, in 1995, the total number of travellers marginally declined from just over 22000 to nearly 21500; however, it steadily grew and reached the peak of approximately 29000 in the year 1998. These people gradually became more interested in traveling to all three regions during this period, but Western Europe was the best option. In 1994, just below 20, 000 of the UK citizens went into Western Europe, compared with only almost 1000 into the North America. Furthermore, after a small drop in 1995, the population of Western Europe visitors remarkably increased and reached the maximum of above 24000 in 1998, which was far more significant than the other two locations. In conclusion, the most proportion of the UK citizens had a trip to Western Europe to spend their holidays and for business trips.
The
given
table compares the figures of
a research
on why 100 thousand of the UK residents visited overseas from 1994 to 1998, and the
given
bar chart illustrates which countries they travelled during this time.

As a whole, the majority of the UK citizens travelled abroad for entertainment, and Western Europe was their most
favourable
destination. By looking at the table, it can be
seen
that
generally
there was a growing tendency for the UK
people
to travel into other countries from 1994 to 1998. During the second year, in 1995, the total number of
travellers
marginally
declined from
just
over 22000 to
nearly
21500;
however
, it
steadily
grew and reached the peak of approximately 29000 in the year 1998.

These
people
gradually
became more interested in traveling to all three regions during this period,
but
Western Europe was the best option. In 1994,
just
below 20, 000 of the UK citizens went into Western Europe, compared with
only
almost 1000 into the North America.
Furthermore
, after a
small
drop in 1995, the population of Western Europe visitors
remarkably
increased and reached the maximum of above 24000 in 1998, which was far more significant than the other two locations.

In conclusion
, the most proportion of the UK citizens had a trip to Western Europe to spend their holidays and for business trips.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100, 000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. v. 1

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