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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v.2

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 2
The provided table represents information on sales of a downtown small restaurant of a typical October week starting from the 7th October till 13th October. As is presented, the restaurant's earning from dinner is much more than the earning from lunch except for the weekend, Sunday. On Monday, the beginning of the week, the restaurant sells lunch of 24 hundred dollars compared to the sales of dinner of 3623 dollars. The sales of dinner compared to lunch is significantly higher than the sell of lunch for the six days of the mentioned week except for the Sunday. The sale of lunch on Tuesday remains almost same as it was on Monday but the dinner sell increased by almost 200 dollars. The earning from the dinner is lowest on Saturday and it is less than 3000 dollar. In the weekend the lunches bring an amount of 1550 dollar compared to 2450 dollar dinner. The restaurant earns about 15 thousand dollars a week by selling the lunch and on the contrary, earns about 22 thousand dollars by selling dinner.
The provided table represents information on
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sales
of a downtown
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small
restaurant of a typical October
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week
starting from the 7th October till 13th October. As
is presented
, the restaurant's earning from
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dinner
is much more than the earning from lunch
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except for
the weekend, Sunday.

On Monday, the beginning of the
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week
, the restaurant sells lunch of 24 hundred
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dollars
compared to the
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sales
of
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dinner
of 3623
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dollars
. The
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sales
of
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dinner
compared to lunch is
significantly
higher than the sell of lunch for the six days of the mentioned
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week
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except for
the Sunday. The
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sale
of lunch on Tuesday remains almost same as it was on Monday
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but
the
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dinner
sell increased by almost 200
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dollars
.
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The
earning from the
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dinner
is
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lowest
on Saturday and it is less than 3000
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dollar
. In the weekend the lunches bring an amount of 1550
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dollar
compared to 2450
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dollar
dinner.

The restaurant earns about 15 thousand
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dollars
a
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week
by selling the lunch and
on the contrary
, earns about 22 thousand
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dollars
by selling
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dinner
.
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22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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