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The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v.5

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 5
The provided table represents information on sales of a small city centre restaurant in a typical October week starting from the 7th October and ending on 13th October. It is immediately apparent that sale during the dinner time is much higher than lunch, also, the sale during the weekend is much lower as compared to weekdays. In details, the sale amount for lunch during the weekdays (Monday to Friday) ranges between 2400 to 2500 dollars, however, the sale on Saturday and Sunday fall much beyond that range at 1950 and 1550 dollars respectively. On Monday, the restaurant sells lunch for 2400 dollars and the sale reaches the peak of 2595 on Wednesday. The sale then falls down a bit on Thursday and recover back to 2500 level on Friday. For dinner sales in this restaurant, the sale is much higher the whole week compared to the lunch sale. Nevertheless, comparing weekdays and weekend sales, the pattern is similar as it is for lunch sales. If we look at weekday sales trend, it is obvious that the sales are quite erratic. On Monday, the restaurant makes a sale of 3623 dollars from dinner and on Tuesday it goes up a bit but on Wednesday. It touches the lowest level of the weekday at 3445 dollars then it recovers and reaches a peak of 4350 dollars on Friday.
The provided table represents information on
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sales
of a
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centre
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restaurant
in a typical October week starting from the 7th October and ending on 13th October. It is immediately apparent that
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sale
during the dinner time is
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much
higher than lunch,
also
, the
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sale
during the weekend is
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much
lower
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as
compared
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to
weekdays.

In
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details
, the
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sale
amount for lunch during the weekdays (Monday to Friday) ranges
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between 2400 to 2500
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dollars
,
however
, the
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sale
on Saturday and Sunday fall
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much
beyond that range at 1950 and 1550
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dollars
respectively
. On Monday, the
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restaurant
sells lunch for 2400
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dollars
and the
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sale
reaches the peak of 2595 on Wednesday. The
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sale
then falls down a bit on Thursday and recover back to 2500 level on Friday.

For dinner
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sales
in this
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restaurant
, the
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sale
is
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higher the whole week compared to the lunch
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sale
.
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, comparing weekdays and weekend
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sales
, the pattern is similar as it is for lunch
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sales
. If we look at weekday
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sales
trend, it is obvious that the
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sales
are quite erratic. On Monday, the
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restaurant
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makes
a
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sale
of 3623
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dollars
from dinner and on Tuesday it goes up a bit
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but
on Wednesday. It touches the lowest level of the weekday at 3445
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then it recovers and reaches a peak of 4350
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dollars
on Friday.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. v. 5

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
226 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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