Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v.1

The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v. 1
The table gives five selected country’s railway related information which includes the percentages of railway users, the distance they travelled on an average and the amount of weight the railways carried in 2015. Overall, Chinese and Indian people used train transportation more and Canada transported the highest amount of cargos on railroads. As can be seen on the table, Canada carried by far the highest cargo, more than 34 billion tons, despite the fact that the railway was less popular among Canadians as only 0. 9 million people used it with 90 kilometer distance per passenger in 2015. This contrasted greatly with China where exactly 34 million people used railroad and each person travelled roughly 2200 km distance on the train. Rail journey was the second most popular in India as 21 million people used it in 2015 with an average of nearly 1500 km travel log for each passenger. Two countries which were almost similar in terms of their railway usage were Malaysia and the UAE. In both in these countries around 800 passenger km was travelled in 2015 while they had 8 -9 million passengers.
The table gives five selected country’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
related information which includes the percentages of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
users, the distance they travelled on an average and the amount of weight the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
carried in 2015.
Overall
, Chinese and Indian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
train transportation more and Canada transported the highest amount of cargos on railroads.

As can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
on the table, Canada carried by far the highest cargo, more than 34 billion tons, despite the fact that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
was less popular among Canadians as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
0. 9
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it with 90 kilometer distance per
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passenger
in 2015. This contrasted
greatly
with China where exactly 34
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
railroad and each person travelled roughly 2200 km distance on the train. Rail journey was the second most popular in India as 21
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it in 2015 with an average of
nearly
1500 km travel log for each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passenger
. Two countries which were almost similar in terms of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railway
usage were Malaysia and the UAE. In both in these countries around 800
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passenger
km
was travelled
in 2015 while they had 8 -9
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
million
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
passengers
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The table below gives information about the rail transport in five countries in 2015. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
187 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts