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The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours. v.2

The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours. v. 2
The tabular chart contrasts the feedback of males and females about the satisfaction level of the services provided by the city sports club. The spectacular feature of the chart is the gratification of females with the opening hours of the club. As is observed from the graph, more than half of the males were very glad by the range of activities the club offered while only a small proportion was disappointed. However, a little bit more than the one-third of females were highly satisfied and satisfied whereas only third-tent were upset from the concerned. Moreover, almost equal number of male and females were pleased with the facilities of the club. On the contrary, 4% more females were downhearted by the club facilities as compared to the males. Moving further, Opening hours meet the expectations of a slightly less than the third-forth of females but only 44% males were very satisfied by the same. In addition, the majority of males were discouraged with the provision of timings. Overall, maximum females were more happy with each aspect of the club than the males.
The tabular chart contrasts the feedback of
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males
and
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females
about the satisfaction level of the services provided by the city sports
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club
. The spectacular feature of the chart is the gratification of
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females
with the opening hours of the club.

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is observed
from the graph, more than half of the
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males
were
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very
glad by the range of activities the
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club
offered while
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only
a
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small
proportion
was disappointed
.
However
, a
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more than the one-third of
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females
were
highly
satisfied and satisfied whereas
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only
third-tent
were upset
from the concerned.
Moreover
, almost equal number of male and
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females
were
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pleased
with the facilities of the
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club
.
On the contrary
, 4% more
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females
were downhearted
by the
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club
facilities as compared to the males.

Moving
further
, Opening hours
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meet
the expectations of a
slightly
less than the third-forth of
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females
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but
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only
44%
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males
were
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very
satisfied by the same.
In addition
, the majority of
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males
were discouraged
with the provision of timings.

Overall
, maximum
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females
were more happy with each aspect of the
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club
than the
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males
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below shows the results of a survey to find out what members of a city sports club think about the club’s activities, facilities and opening hours. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
181 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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