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The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set u v.4

The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set u v. 4
The charts compares the estimated expenditure allocated for three primary projects related to sustainable foresting and the cost breakdown that will be taken into consideration during the establishment of the projects in the first year. As illustrated by the table, the expense used for environmental projects in South-east Asia is likely to witness a noticeable rocket over the next five years compared with the opposite pattern being anticipated in the counterparts. Also of note is that workers’ monthly pay is expected to constitute the largest proportion of the projected expenditure. In the first year, the expected cost spent for sustainable forestry in Central America is 20 million which roughly doubles the corresponding figure for West Africa (10. 5 million). Meanwhile, the top overhead cost in year 1 is forecast to belong to South-east Asia, with 30 million. According to current predictions, both areas West Africa and Central America will expend the smaller amount of money on environmental projects during the following period, observing a notable surge to 3. 5 million and 5 million respectively, compared with a consistent growth of 20 million being anticipated as for South-east Asia. A closer look at the expected expenses in the first year, it is evident that salaries for project participants stand a chance to account for 50%. The other half is classified into three main categories, with the same figure 10% being experienced in the office and training costs, as opposed to a exceeding higher figure being recorded in the set-up costs (30%) in year 1.
The charts
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the estimated expenditure allocated for three primary
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projects
related to sustainable foresting and the
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cost
breakdown that will
be taken
into consideration during the establishment of the
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projects
in the
first
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year
. As illustrated by the table, the expense
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used
for environmental
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projects
in South-east Asia is likely to witness a noticeable rocket over the
next
five years compared with the opposite pattern
being anticipated
in the counterparts.
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of note is that workers’ monthly pay is
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expected
to constitute the largest proportion of the projected expenditure.

In the
first
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year
, the
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expected
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cost
spent for sustainable forestry in Central America is 20
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million
which roughly doubles the corresponding figure for West Africa (10. 5
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million)
. Meanwhile, the top overhead
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cost
in
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year
1 is forecast to belong to South-east Asia, with 30
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million
. According to
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current
predictions, both areas West Africa and Central America will expend the smaller amount of money on environmental
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projects
during the following period, observing a notable surge to 3. 5
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million
and 5
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million
respectively
, compared with a consistent growth of 20
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million
being anticipated
as for South-east Asia.

A closer look at the
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expected
expenses in the
first
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year
, it is evident that salaries for
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participants stand a chance to account for 50%. The other half
is classified
into three main categories, with the same figure 10%
being experienced
in the office and training
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costs
, as opposed to
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a
exceeding higher figure
being recorded
in the set-up
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costs
(30%) in
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year
1.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The table below shows the projected costings over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects sustainable forestry The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first years as the projects are set u v. 4

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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