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The table below shows the projected costing over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are se v.2

The table below shows the projected costing over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are se v. 2
The table illustrates the estimated expenditures for three environmental projects in American dollars in three large parts of the world. The projected estimation included the time horizon for 5 years where costings are shown according to each year. It is clear predicted that the most costly years will be the first year in all three regions. However, the highest costs are expected in South-East Asia where costs are predicted to be 30 million American dollars, while 10 million dollars less are expected to spend in Central America and about 20 million dollars are lover in West Africa. According to the third there forecast, expenditures in West Africa and Central America will decrease sharply to 7, 5 million and 12 million respectively in the second year. The following two years the expenses in both regions will reduce almost twice in comparison with the previous year and will remain steady. By contrast, forecaster changes in South-east Asia will decrease almost one third the second year (in comparison with the first year), but will grow twice the third year (in comparison with the second year) and will increase slightly the fourth year remaining stable the next year at 50 million dollars. From the pie chart it can be seen is that in the first year a half of costs will cover salaries, one-third or the finance will be devoted to the set-up costs and the rest of money is planned to divide equally between training and office expenses. To conclude, the most expensive environmental financing is expected to be in South-east Asia primarily because of overall growth of expenses there within following four years.
The table illustrates the estimated expenditures for three environmental projects in American
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in three large parts of the world. The projected estimation included the time horizon for 5
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years where
costings
are shown
according to each year.

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predicted that the most costly years will be the
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in all three regions.
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, the highest
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costs
are
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in South-East Asia where
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are predicted
to be 30
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million
American
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, while 10
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million
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less are
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to spend in Central America and about 20
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are lover in West Africa. According to the third there forecast, expenditures in West Africa and Central America will decrease
sharply
to 7, 5
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million
and 12
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respectively
in the second
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. The following two years the expenses in both regions will
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reduce
almost twice
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and will remain steady. By contrast, forecaster
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changes
in South-east Asia will decrease almost one third the second
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(
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,
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will grow twice the third
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(
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and will increase
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the fourth
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remaining stable the
next
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at 50
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From the pie chart it can be
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is that in the
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a half of
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costs
will cover salaries, one-third or the finance will
be devoted
to the set-up
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costs
and the rest of money
is planned
to divide
equally
between training and office expenses.

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, the most expensive environmental financing is
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expected
to be in South-east Asia
primarily
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because
of
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growth of expenses there within following four years.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the projected costing over the next five years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. The pie chart shows the expected expenditure breakdown allocation for the first year as the projects are se v. 2

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