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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v.2

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 2
The column graph gives a projection on the next year’s jeans sales of two companies in Turkey while the pie chart compares their estimated market share. Overall, jeans sales are estimated to increase at the last quarter next year and Jack & Jones brand is anticipated to have half of the market share. According to the first graph, Jack & Jones jeans clothing sale will be roughly 450 thousand pairs in Turkey, which is almost three times higher than that of Mango brand. At end of the first quarter, Jack & Jones is estimated to sell 300 thousand pairs of jeans in Turkey while it would be just above 150 thousand for Mango. In July and August, the demand for Mango jeans is estimated to exceed the demand of Jack & Jones. However, Jack & Jones is likely to witness a hike in its jeans sale during the last quarter of the year and in December it will sell 900, 000 pairs, double than its sale in January. During the last quarter, Mango jean’s sale would remain almost the same except a surge in December to 600 thousand sales. It is predicted that Jack & Jones alone will control the half of the market share while Mango corporation will have 30% market share. The remaining 20% would be controlled by the other jeans manufacturers.
The column graph gives a projection on the
next
year’s jeans
sales
of two
companies
in Turkey while the pie chart compares their
estimated
market
share.
Overall
, jeans
sales
are
estimated
to increase at the last
quarter
next
year and Jack &
Jones
brand
is anticipated
to have half of the
market
share.

According to the
first
graph, Jack &
Jones
jeans clothing
sale
will be roughly 450 thousand pairs in Turkey, which is almost three times higher than that of Mango brand. At
end
of the
first
quarter
, Jack &
Jones
is
estimated
to sell 300 thousand pairs of jeans in Turkey while it would be
just
above 150 thousand for Mango. In July and August, the demand for Mango jeans is
estimated
to exceed the demand of Jack &
Jones
.
However
, Jack &
Jones
is likely to witness a hike in its jeans
sale
during the last
quarter
of the year and in December it will sell 900, 000 pairs,
double
than its
sale
in January. During the last
quarter
, Mango jean’s
sale
would remain almost the same except a surge in December to 600 thousand sales.

It
is predicted
that Jack &
Jones
alone will control the half of the
market
share while Mango corporation will have 30%
market
share. The remaining 20% would
be controlled
by the other jeans manufacturers.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
224 words
6.5
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