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The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 v.1

The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 v. 1
The table compares how many people using a bicycle by age and gender in 2011. Generally, children under 9 years old used bicycles the most, while middle-aged people were the least likely to ride a bicycle. Besides, women tended to cycle more than men during the period shown. As can be seen from the table, the 0-9 age group occupied the largest proportion of cyclists, with about 52% for females and just a little less with over 50% for males. However, at 10-17 age the number of girls riding a bicycle was 42%, while the figure for boys halved to around 25% compared to the original. Regarding the other older groups, only having 17% of the ladies and approximately 10% of the guys from 18 to 39 year old enjoyed this activity. In the 40-59 age gather, it seems that cycling was not very popular, so the figure for both males and females were 8% and 12%, respectively, the lowest in the table. According to the last group (60 and over), the percentage of women cycled accounting for 18% and that of men made up 13%.
The table compares how
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people
using a
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bicycle
by
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age
and gender in 2011.

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, children under 9 years
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old
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used
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bicycles
the most, while middle-aged
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people
were the least likely to ride a
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bicycle
.
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, women tended to cycle more than
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men
during the period shown.

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seen
from the table, the 0-9
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age
group occupied the largest proportion of cyclists, with about 52% for females and
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just
a
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less with over 50% for males.
However
, at 10-17
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age
the number of girls riding a
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bicycle
was 42%, while the figure for boys halved to around 25% compared to the original.

Regarding the other older groups,
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having 17% of the ladies and approximately 10% of the guys from 18 to 39 year
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old
enjoyed this activity. In the 40-59
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age
gather, it seems that cycling was not
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very
popular,
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the figure for both males and females were 8% and 12%,
respectively
, the lowest in the table. According to the last group (60 and over), the percentage of women cycled accounting for 18% and that of
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men
made up 13%.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentages of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011 v. 1

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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