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Task1 - 2: The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v.2

Task1 - 2: The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v. 2
The given table illustrates the proportions of cyclists among a town’s population in 2011 in accordance to 5 different age groups. Overall, for all surveyed age groups, the higher proportions always belong to women. In addition, bicycles were mostly risen by children who are under 9-year-old contrasting to the lowest figures for the age group of 40-59. First of all, while 51. 3% and 42. 2% were the figure for females who were younger than 9 and in the 10-17 age group, the figures for men were considerably lower with 50. 3% and 24. 6% respectively. There was a slightly decrease in the proportions for both genders when surveying 18-39 and 40-59 age group and this decline demonstrated by 17. 1%, 12. 3% for females and 9. 7%, 8. 0% for males accordingly. Furthermore, when implementing the statistic in the percentages of cyclists who were older than 60-year-old, the result showed that there were only 13. 2% of male population interested in cycling in comparison to a bit higher at 18% for females.
The
given
table illustrates the proportions of cyclists among a town’s population in 2011 in accordance to 5
different
age
groups.

Overall
, for all surveyed
age
groups
, the higher proportions always belong to women.
In addition
, bicycles were
mostly
risen by children who are under 9-year-
old
contrasting to the lowest figures for the
age
group
of 40-59.

First of all
, while 51. 3% and 42. 2% were the figure for females who were younger than 9 and in the 10-17
age
group
, the figures for
men
were
considerably
lower with 50. 3% and 24. 6%
respectively
. There was a
slightly decrease
in the proportions for both genders when surveying 18-39 and 40-59
age
group
and this decline demonstrated by 17. 1%, 12. 3% for females and 9. 7%, 8. 0% for males
accordingly
.

Furthermore
, when implementing the statistic in the percentages of cyclists who were older than 60-year-
old
, the result
showed
that there were
only
13. 2% of male population interested in cycling
in comparison
to a bit higher at 18% for females.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS academic Task1 - 2: The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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