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The charts below show the percentage of water used by different sectors in Sydney, Australia, in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The charts below show the percentage of water used by different sectors in Sydney, Australia, in 1997 and 2007.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of total water consumption by 5 factors in Sydney, Australia during the period of 10 years from 1997 to 2007. Overall, it is clear that the food industry consumed the largest amount of total water usage. Moreover, the percentage of total water used by the service industry in 2007 was almost double the figure for 1997. Units are measured in percentage. During a decade, food industry saw a slight decline of 7%, from 48% in 1997 to 41% in 2007. Manufacturing and building industry also witnessed a decline in the percentage of total water consumption. The total amount of water used by the former in 2007 was 4% lower than that in 1997, whereas the figure for the latter merely decreased from 5% to 2%. On the contrary, there are two sectors experienced an increase in the proportion of total water usage. Service industry accounted for 25% of the total water used, almost twice as the figure for 1997, at 13%. It was followed by household use, which experienced a slight increase of 3% to reach 21% in 2007.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
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consumption by 5 factors in Sydney, Australia during the period of 10 years from 1997 to 2007.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the food
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industry
consumed the largest amount of
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total
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water
usage.
Moreover
, the percentage of
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total
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water
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used
by the service
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industry
in 2007 was almost double the figure for 1997. Units
are measured
in percentage.

During a decade, food
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industry
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saw
a slight decline of 7%, from 48% in 1997 to 41% in 2007. Manufacturing and building
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industry
also
witnessed a decline in the percentage of
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total
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water
consumption. The
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amount of
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water
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used
by the former in 2007 was 4% lower than that in 1997, whereas the figure for the latter
merely
decreased from 5% to 2%.

On the contrary
, there are two sectors experienced an increase in the proportion of
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total
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usage. Service
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industry
accounted for 25% of the
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used
, almost twice as the figure for 1997, at 13%. It
was followed
by household
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use
, which experienced a slight increase of 3% to reach 21% in 2007.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the percentage of water used by different sectors in Sydney, Australia, in 1997 and 2007.

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4 paragraphs
185 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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