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The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v.2

The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v. 2
Given is the table illustrating the number of people in all age used bicycles in a town around 2011. It is clear from the table that female in all age group occupied the most percentage on bicycles. By contrast, male was the category receiving the least expenditure. For the female, the rate of people aged 0-9 was highest, at 51, 3%, while, the figure for people who were 10-17 was significantly lower, at 42, 2%. Women who took part in riding bicycles over 60 years old accounted for 18, 5%. Meanwhile, the percentage of 18-39-year-old people and 40-59-year-old people were lowest, at 17, 1% and 12, 3% respectively. The proportion of male who rode bicycles in the 0-9 age group was also highest among 5 age group, at 50, 3%. 10-17-year-olds and 18-39-year-olds riders made up 24, 6% and 9, 7% respectively, while, 13, 2% of men over 60 years old chose to use bicycles. By contrast, spending on this item in the 40-59 age group was the smallest proportion, at 8% of the total spending on bicycles.
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is the table illustrating the number of
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people
in all
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age
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used
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bicycles
in a town around 2011.

It is
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clear
from the table that female in all
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age
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group
occupied the most percentage on
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bicycles
. By contrast, male was the category receiving the least expenditure.

For the female, the rate of
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people
aged 0-9 was highest, at 51, 3%, while, the figure for
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people
who were 10-17 was
significantly
lower, at 42, 2%. Women who
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took part
in riding
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bicycles
over 60 years
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old
accounted for 18, 5%. Meanwhile, the percentage of 18-39-year-
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old
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people
and 40-59-year-
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old
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people
were lowest, at 17, 1% and 12, 3%
respectively
.

The proportion of male who rode
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bicycles
in the 0-9
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age
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group
was
also
highest among 5
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age
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group
, at 50, 3%. 10-17-year-olds and 18-39-year-olds riders made up 24, 6% and 9, 7%
respectively
, while, 13, 2% of
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men
over 60 years
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old
chose to
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use
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bicycles
. By contrast, spending on this item in the 40-59
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age
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group
was the smallest proportion, at 8% of the total spending on
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bicycles
.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
178 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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